This is something I was able to piece together. I got an idea and then let it sat for a while before finally starting work on it. As per usual, it ended up different than the original idea but I've started seeing that as a good thing. This is nice and short, so I hope you enjoy!
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This story has been redacted and taken down for now, and will be back soon. I've submitted it to a flash fiction contest which means there needs to be exclusivity at first. Hopefully the fact it was already published here doesn't mean it's ineligible as it was one of the most well received things I've written.
Great story, Mark! I like the twist at the end!You had me fooled the whole time. Also, you did an awesome job portraying the chaos using such a few amount of words. Looking forward to more of these stories!
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At first I was wondering how a man managed to sneak a gun into prison and commit suicide with it but then I was like :O
ReplyDeleteLooks like he's in for some serious time with the local psychiatrist.
Great story.
ReplyDeleteI loved the way nothing happened (in the story itself, not in the story's reality) and it was all in the person's head. The kind of perspective the character had can only come from being in prison or being too old... that is, having had the chance to think a lot.
Ha, that's a great twist, and this was executed with such cleverness. I really love this story. I did not expect him to be a guard - it really humanizes a prisoner, doesn't it?
ReplyDeleteMy uncle used to be a guard at a prison, and the things I've heard that he had to do to survive (including breaking the jaw of a guy that tried to shank him) sound just terrible. As terrible as actually being a prisoner, if not more.
This was very good. I don't like depressing stories (I'm too emotional and they bring me down for days), but the writing was fantastic and the storyline was twisted and clinched just right.
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You worked a good twist in there. Good to explore the definition of humanity.
ReplyDeleteThe twist was wonderful!
ReplyDeleteAWWWWW!!!!!
ReplyDeleteAlright. This was a good read :D Really!
i like how you have poured your feeling into this post. The message is wonderful and worth pondering.
Nice narrative :)
ReplyDeleteHarrowing, I like it.
ReplyDeleteThoughtful and well portrayed.
ReplyDeleteThat was intriguing.
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Awesome. I totally did not see that twist coming at the end. Amazing piece.
ReplyDeleteJust brilliant.
ReplyDeleteComing up with such amazing fiction, you must've got something.
Excellent. No other words, just excellent.
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